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공개 첨삭 완료 2014. 02. 03 조회 13380

Self Introduction

작성자: 1102013648 담당 튜터: Claudia
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My name is Changhoon kang and my English name is Ricky. I was born on February 24th, 1980. So I’m 35 years old. I live in Suwon with my wife. And I have no child.
I work as a SW engineer at Samsung SDS. I have developed many SW programs about network server for 9 years.
My hobby is a dancing. Especially I dance to the swing . The swing is a dancing to the rhythm of the Jazz music with a partner. I have danced the swing for 5 years.
I performed swing dance 5 times in front of many peoples. I think that dancing a swing changes my life to be more energetic.
튜터 교정 답변

My name is Changhoon Kang and my English name is Ricky. I was born on February 24th, 1980. So, I’m 35 years old. I live in Suwon with my wife. And I have no child. I work as an SW engineer at Samsung SDS. I have developed many SW programs about network server for 9 years. My hobby is a dancing. I especially love to dance swing . The Swing is dancing to the rhythm of the Jazz music with a partner. I have been dancing swing for 5 years. I performed swing dance 5 times in front of many people. I think that dancing a swing changes my life to be more energetic.

My name is Changhoon Kang and my English name is Ricky. I was born on February 24th, 1980. So, I'm 35 years old. I live in Suwon with my wife. I have no child. I work as an SW engineer at Samsung SDS. I have developed many SW programs about network server for 9 years. My hobby is dancing. I especially love to dance swing. Swing is dancing to the rhythm of Jazz music with a partner. I have been dancing swing for 5 years. I performed swing dance 5 times in front of many people. I think that dancing swing changes my life to be more energetic.

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Hello, Ricky!

I'm glad to have read your composition. I appreciate that you spent time writing your introduction. Oh well, I love dancing too. I used to dance a lot when I was in high school. Well, I guess we have a lot to discuss in our class. So, talk to you later! ^^,

- Claudia

 

 

 

 

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