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공개 첨삭 완료 2014. 07. 25 조회 12723

My weekend

작성자: 118748 담당 튜터: Riz
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I usually stay at home on weekends even though I like hanging out.
Because my daughter is third-year of high school.
It is difficult to entered in University in korea and She have to study hard.
So i have to stay beside her on weekends.
Because i am sorry to her, if i hang out alone for me.
But I regularly go to big supermarket with my wife on weekends.
This time is very good for me.
I can enjoy shopping and have a nice meal.
And sometimes, I go to temple near my home.
I believe in Buddha. I like going to temple and praying for happiness of my family.
After i go and get back there, i always feel great.
튜터 교정 답변

I usually stay at home on weekends even though I like hanging out. -good

Because my daughter is third-year of high school. good

It is difficult to entered in University in korea and She have to study hard.

So i have to stay beside her on weekends. - good

Because i am sorry to her, if i hang out alone for me.- good

But I regularly go to big supermarket with my wife on weekend- good

This time day is very good for me.-

I can enjoy shopping and have a nice meal. good

And sometimes, I go to the temple near my home.

I believe in Buddha.- 

I like going to temple and praying for happiness of my family.

After i go and get back there, i always feel great.- good

 

Hi There,

Keep up the good work

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