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공개 첨삭 완료 2014. 07. 25 조회 12956

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작성자: 1102044240 담당 튜터: Paula
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I like to go to the beach.
Also, I can be good check out some hot chick on the beach.


I had my most memorable experience at my daughter kindergarten graduate concert.
My daughter and her's friends are prepared very hard music and dance.
I was included everyone to them clap one's hands and sing along.
Finally, We all stood up to pay tribute the excellent performance.
Because, we all to know their worked hard.
튜터 교정 답변

I like to go to the beach. Also, I can be good check out some hot chick on the beach. 

-> I like to go to the beach because I can check out some hot girls on the beach. 

 

I had my most memorable experience at my daughter kindergarten graduate concert. My daughter and her's friends are prepared very hard music and dance. I was included everyone to them clap one's hands and sing along. Finally, We all stood up to pay tribute the excellent performance. Because, we all to know their worked hard.

-> I had my most memorable experience at my daughter's kindergarten graduation concert. My daughter and her friends prepared very hard for a music and dance presentation. I clapped my hands and sing along. Finally, We all stood up to pay tribute to the excellent performance. Because, we all know that they worked hard.

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