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My name is Jinsu Kim.
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I work at Public Development Department of Samsung SDS.
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Since 2012, I have worked on Korea ON-line E-Procurement System(KONEPS) project of Public Procurement Service(PPS) in Daejeon.
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It’s a part of my job to maintain the KONEPS system.
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In particular, I process requests of the client, PPS, to change the system’s database models, which includes its design.
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Before joining Samsung SDS, I studied Information & Telecommunication toward my Bachelor's degree at ChungBuk National University to develop my strong interest in Information Technology (IT). 
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So, I enjoy working as a system engineer.
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[Comment]

Hello Daniel!

Fantastic! You introduced yourself with the important information you need to indicate. How you introduce youself will leave a lasting impression to your reader. Introducing youself in an interesting way will help people remember you. Sometimes, the information you should say depends on what they ask from you, so make sure to be mindful about it. 

Take Care!

-T. Sandy-