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공개 첨삭 완료 2014. 07. 27 조회 14688

traveling experience internationally!

작성자: 1101875579 담당 튜터: Belle
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Today, I want to tell you about traveling experience internationally.
I have experiences that I went to an other contries like India, Cambodia, Japan, Taiwan.
I went to India and Cambodia for volunteer work and I traveled Japan and Taiwan alon.
It was very good memory for me. one of the best contry where I have been is in the India.
I don't forget smile of children. They lived not good enviroment.
But They look like happinest in the world because always with smile.
I didn't satisfy my life at that time, although I have a lot of things.
They did't get many things, they can enjoy their life and afford whatever.
I was shamed. when I came back to Korea, the experience became positive energy.
So, after 2 years, I would go to Cambodia for vorunteer work.
튜터 교정 답변

Today, I want to tell you about my traveling experience internationally.

I have experiences that I went to an other another contries like India, Cambodia, Japan, Taiwan.

I went to India and Cambodia for volunteer worked and I traveled Japan and Taiwan alone.

It was very good memory experienced for me, one of the best contry countries where I have been is in the India.

I don't never forget the smile of children.

They lived in a not good enviroment.

But They look like happinest in the world  very happy because they always with smile.

I didn't satisfy my life at that time, although I have a lot of things.

They did't get many things, they can enjoy their life and afford whatever.

I was shamed. when I came back to Korea, the experienced became positive energy.

So, after 2 years, I would go to Cambodia for vorunteer volunteer work.

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