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공개 첨삭 완료 2014. 07. 31 조회 12551

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작성자: 1102044240 담당 튜터: Paula
수강생 원문과 튜터 교정 (Before & After)
학생 제출 원문
When i was a kid my father gave me a cut dog.
At that time, she was an two month old 진돗개 and we after much consideration and settled on the name 오바마
오바마 and i have been best friends ever since
we went to park together on weekends.
although, now is without her, once she means the world to my whole family.


my favorite museum is the Leeum art museum.
It is huge and about one thousand people can enjoy the art at the same time.
the whole building is very clean and modern-looking go it like it.
actually, i have never been able to paint.
so, i was envious to be a good painter.
But, i like the art museum because could many things.
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When i was a kid my father gave me a cut dog. At that time, she was an two month old 진돗개 and we after much consideration and settled on the name 오바마 오바마 and i have been best friends ever since we went to park together on weekends. although, now is without her, once she means the world to my whole family. 

-> When i was a kid my father gave me a cute dog. At that time, she was two months old 진돗개 and we consider and settled to the name 오바마 오바마 and we became best friends. We went to park together every weekends. Although, she's already gone, she means the world to my whole family. 

my favorite museum is the Leeum art museum. It is huge and about one thousand people can enjoy the art at the same time. the whole building is very clean and modern-looking go it like it. actually, i have never been able to paint. so, i was envious to be a good painter. But, i like the art museum because could many things.

-> My favorite museum is the Leeum art museum. It is huge and about one thousand people can enjoy the art at the same time. The whole building is very clean and modern-looking. Actually, I  have never been able to paint. So, I am envious and I want to be a good painter. But, I like the art museum because I could see many things.

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