Playing a game
수강생 원문과 튜터 교정 (Before & After)
학생 제출 원문
Hi teacher Tara.
I really nice to hear your voice again.
Thank you for teaching again.
If you don't mind,
I try to make some sentences about playing a game that we treated as today's topic in the morning.
I can't say that I often to play game these days.
But I try to do it whenever I have a time.
Because It makes me relieve my stress and refresh my mind.
I usally play game at the living-room or my room.
Because there are my computer and game garget.
What I like most about the game garget is Play-station came from Japan.
I offeres very fatastic graphic performance.
It is really helpful to play game which make me more enjoyable.
For those of the reasons, I like to play game in my house.
Thanks!
Sincerly yours.
I really nice to hear your voice again.
Thank you for teaching again.
If you don't mind,
I try to make some sentences about playing a game that we treated as today's topic in the morning.
I can't say that I often to play game these days.
But I try to do it whenever I have a time.
Because It makes me relieve my stress and refresh my mind.
I usally play game at the living-room or my room.
Because there are my computer and game garget.
What I like most about the game garget is Play-station came from Japan.
I offeres very fatastic graphic performance.
It is really helpful to play game which make me more enjoyable.
For those of the reasons, I like to play game in my house.
Thanks!
Sincerly yours.
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