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공개 첨삭 완료 2014. 08. 04 조회 13105

self introdution

작성자: 1102018927 담당 튜터: Faith
수강생 원문과 튜터 교정 (Before & After)
학생 제출 원문
my name is JI KYOUNG, english name is SARAH
i'm twenti-night years old

i work for a samsung sds
my department is safety-enviroment part

i was born is CHANGWON
now i live in SEOUL,
i have lived there ten month

there are four member in my family
father, mother, brother and me

my mother used to piano teather in academy
but now housewife

i'm intersting in finding new resturance and bar
one of my favorite things to do on weekends
is visiting trendy resturance and bar

and i allso loke to travel a lot
i try to travel abroad once a year.
튜터 교정 답변

My name is JI KYOUNG. My English name is SARAH. I'm twenti-night years old and I work for a samsung sds. My department is at the safety-enviroment part. I was born is in CHANGWON and now I live in SEOUL,I have lived there for ten months.There are four member in my family my father, mother, brother and me. My mother used to be a piano teacher in an academy but she is now a housewife. I'm intersting ed in finding new resturance restaurants and bars. One of my favorite things to do on weekends is visiting trendy resturance  restaurants and basr and I also like to travel a lot. iI    to try to travel abroad once a year.

Hi Sera!

When writing a sentence you should always capitalize the letter I, especially if you are going to use this as the first word in your sentence and check on the right punctuation that you're going to use in your sentence.

Teacher Faith

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