My introduction
수강생 원문과 튜터 교정 (Before & After)
학생 제출 원문
My name is samgmoon Han, english name is david han.
I was born on 21 jan 1970 and I'm in my mid 40's.
I Work as computer manager at samsung company.
I have been for 21 years since entering this company
so I specialize in computer security.
I usually do very calmy and easy-going in my workplace.
but when I play sports, I change very active-person.
My hobby is playing badminton and it is very hard to do but
I think it is the funnest sports in the world.
I am the youngest in my family and I have one elder brother.
I was born on 21 jan 1970 and I'm in my mid 40's.
I Work as computer manager at samsung company.
I have been for 21 years since entering this company
so I specialize in computer security.
I usually do very calmy and easy-going in my workplace.
but when I play sports, I change very active-person.
My hobby is playing badminton and it is very hard to do but
I think it is the funnest sports in the world.
I am the youngest in my family and I have one elder brother.
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