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공개 첨삭 완료 2014. 02. 04 조회 14285

My introduction

작성자: 119159 담당 튜터: Faith2
수강생 원문과 튜터 교정 (Before & After)
학생 제출 원문
My name is samgmoon Han, english name is david han.
I was born on 21 jan 1970 and I'm in my mid 40's.
I Work as computer manager at samsung company.
I have been for 21 years since entering this company
so I specialize in computer security.
I usually do very calmy and easy-going in my workplace.
but when I play sports, I change very active-person.
My hobby is playing badminton and it is very hard to do but
I think it is the funnest sports in the world.
I am the youngest in my family and I have one elder brother.
튜터 교정 답변
My name is samgmoon Han.My English name is David Han. I was born on the 21st of January, year 1970 and I'm in my mid 40's. I work as a computer manager at samsung company. I have been working for my company for 21 years now so I specialized in computer security. I usually work calmy and an easy-going person in my workplace, but when I play sports, I change into a very active-person. My hobby is playing badminton and it is very hard to do it but I think it is the funniest sports in the world. I am the youngest in my family and I have one elder brother.
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