A place I have visited while on a vacation
and I plan beforehand.
I like domestic travel because it shows me how beautiful my country is.
One day I had the chance to visit Gyeongju.
It's located in North Gyeongsang Province on the southeastern part of Korea.
It's one of the historical cities in Korea.
It has many historical attractions scattered around the area dated from the Silla Kingdom.
Gyeongju is always filled with vacationers, young and old alike, during the holidays.
I like going there because I can learn about our country’s history and appreciate it.
I leave the place feeling more patriotic than ever.
Whenever I travel, there is always something new and I find many things to discover and I plan beforehand. I like domestic travel because it shows me how beautiful my country is. One day I had the chance to visit Gyeongju. It's located in North Gyeongsang Province on the southeastern part of Korea. It's one of the historical cities in Korea. It has many historical attractions scattered around the area dated from the Silla Kingdom. Gyeongju is always filled with vacationers, young and old alike, during the holidays. I like going there because I can learn about our country’s history and appreciate it. I leave the place feeling more patriotic than ever.
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-> Whenever I travel, there is always something new. and I find many things to discover and I plan beforehand.
You may also write it this way: Whenever I travel, I always plan beforehand. There are many things to discover and I always find something new.
- > It's located in North Gyeongsang Province, which is in the southeastern part of Korea.
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Hi Jason,
You did a good job in describing your vacation. As usual, you only had minimal lapses. Great job!
To explain more about your corrections, avoid using to many conjunctions (and) in one sentence. It's better to put your ideas in separate sentences in that case. Be mindful of the use of prepositions as well. We don't usually use "on" when talking about places, like compass points for example. I hope this helps. Have a nice day Jason! 