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공개 첨삭 완료 2014. 08. 20 조회 12990

My friend<-I want to talk with you about it today(8/20)

작성자: 71400 담당 튜터: Meril
수강생 원문과 튜터 교정 (Before & After)
학생 제출 원문
I would like to tell you about one of my best friends.
His name is mt.Hwang.
He is same age to me and very handssome guy.
In fact, my first impression of him was not good and was not bad.
Because we were working at different team, and me sometimes met in the way.
But situation was changed.
2 month ago, he moved his house to my apartment complex.
When I was very surprised to see him in my apartment.
After that, we tried to get togher.
Sometimes we played a badminton and sometimes we went to the hiking.
Through that time, I deeply understand what he think.
And now we are very closed co-worker in my office.
튜터 교정 답변

I would like to tell you about one of my best friends. His name is mt.Hwang.

-> I would like to tell you about one of my best friends. His name is Mr.Hwang. 

He is same age to me and very handssome guy.

-> He is at the same age to as me and he is also a very handsome guy. 

In fact, my first impression of him was not good and was not bad. Because we were working at different team, and me sometimes met in the way.

-> In fact, my first impression of him was not good and was not bad. Because we were working at different team, and me we sometimes met in the way do not meet often. 

But situation was changed. 2 month ago, he moved his house to my apartment complex. When I was very surprised to see him in my apartment.

-> But the situation was changed 2 months ago, he moved his house into to my apartment complex. When I was very surprised to see him in my apartment building.

 After that, we tried to get togher. Sometimes we played a badminton and sometimes we went to the hiking. Through that time, I deeply understand what he think. And now we are very closed co-worker in my office.

->  After that, we tried to get together. Sometimes we played a badminton and sometimes we go went to the hiking. Throughout that time, I deeply understand understood what he was thinking. And now we are very closed co-worker in my office.

 

HI John, I'm sorry again for checking this late. I am happy that you are very understanding. You made a good composition about Mr. Hwang. I am sure that you care about him a lot. I am sure that Mr. Hwang is very happy to have you as his friend. Thank you again for this composition. See you in class. 

 

^_^ Meril

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