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공개 첨삭 완료 2014. 02. 10 조회 14298

'14.2.10

작성자: 1101091787 담당 튜터: Ritchell
수강생 원문과 튜터 교정 (Before & After)
학생 제출 원문
□ Please review and correct the sentence

Two days ago, My first uncle passed away Because he gets acute pneumonia.
After car accident twenty years ago, He experienced mental disorder!
So, He had lived with my grandmother!
On hearing an obituary(a report of death), I rush to a funeral hall.
My family were already arrived and mourned a his death.
During the two day, I had participated in a wake.
I hope to stay at there but, I can't stay longer due to the work.
Many came to pay their last respects.
During looking the his portrait, I felt the futility of life.(in vain)
Even though, He passed away, our family hope that he will go to the blessed land.
튜터 교정 답변

□ Please review and correct the sentence Two days ago, My my first uncle passed away Because because he gets got acute pneumonia. After his car accident twenty years ago, He he experienced a mental disorder, So, He had lived with my grandmother! so he had to live with my grandmother. On hearing an obituary(a report of death), After reading the obituary, (a notice of someone's death) I rushed to a the funeral hall. My family were had already arrived and mourned a his his death. During the two days, I had participated in a wake. I attended the wake. I hope to stay at there but I can't stay longer due to the work. I hoped to stay there but I couldn't because of my work. Many came to pay their last respects. During Upon looking the his portrait, I felt the futility of life (in vain). Even though He he passed away, our family hopes that he will go to the blessed land or our family hopes he will rest in peace.

* Obituary - a notice of someone's death; usually includes a short biography.

* Pay your respects - to honour someone after their death, usually by going to their funeral.

Jang,

One generally attends a service/wake/funeral. To participate, one would need to do something like read a lesson or a poem, present a eulogy, play a musical instrument, sing a solo, be a pall-bearer, take up the collection, be an usher. So I guess in your sentence, you better use "attend" instead of participate.

I'm sorry to hear that, I offered my condolences to your family Jang.

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