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공개 첨삭 완료 2014. 08. 28 조회 14224

Regularly excercise.

작성자: 1101875579 담당 튜터: Meril
수강생 원문과 튜터 교정 (Before & After)
학생 제출 원문
Thanks to your answer to my English composition.

Have you had any unforgettable experiences when doing excersie? If so, when was it and where were you doing excercise? Tell me about the experience in as much detail as you can.

- I was hectic these days for me. Because I started new project for work. I hardly had enough time to do excercise. I'm usually sitting front of my computer during work. I hardly ever move. Finally, I felt strange. I had a disk in my neck. I known that It is important to do excercise.
Whenever I get home alrealy, I try to go to the park in my neighborhood. but I can't work hard because It can put stress on the neck.
And then I think exercise give me some kind of power and motivation in my day life.
튜터 교정 답변

Thanks to your answer to my English composition. 

-> Thanks to for your answer to my English composition. 

Have you had any unforgettable experiences when doing excersie? If so, when was it and where were you doing excercise? Tell me about the experience in as much detail as you can. 

I was hectic these days for me. Because I started new project for work. 

-> I was hectic These days were hectic for me. Because I started a new project for work. 

I hardly had enough time to do excercise. I'm usually sitting front of my computer during work. 

-> I hardly had have enough time to do excercise. I'm usually sitting in front of my computer during work. 

I hardly ever move. Finally, I felt strange. I had a disk in my neck. I known that It is important to do excercise. 

-> I hardly ever move. Finally, I felt strange. I had a disk in my neck. I known that it is important to do excercise. 

Whenever I get home alrealy, I try to go to the park in my neighborhood. but I can't work hard because It can put stress on the neck. And then I think exercise give me some kind of power and motivation in my day life.

-> Whenever I get home alrealy early, I try to go to the park in my neighborhood, but I can't work hard because it can put stress on the neck. And then I think exercise give me some kind of power and motivation in my day life.

 

Hi Song, I am sorry to hear that you are stressed about your work lately. I hope that you can take better care of yourself so that you won't get sick again. I am happy to hear that even though you are so very busy, you still find time to exercise. See you late in class. 

 

^_^ Meril

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