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Describe my house (1/2)

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I will tell you about my house.
I live in an apartment in Seocho-gu which is southern part of Seoul.
It is on the 7th floor and has a beautiful view of a park.
There are three bedrooms, a bath room, a kitchen and a living room in my apartment.

When you open the door, you can see a shoe cabinet on your left.
On your right, there is a bath room. Every morning I take a shower listening to music.

Beyond the entrance place, there is a living room in the middle of my house.
The living room has a comfortable sofa, luxurious smart TV and home theater system.
I like to spend time watching TV in the living room.
These days, I watch TV historical drama about Korean traditional hero.
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I will tell you about my house. I live in an apartment in Seocho-gu which is southern part of Seoul. It is on the 7th floor and has a beautiful view of a park. There are three bedrooms, a bath room, a kitchen and a living room in my apartment. When you open the door, you can see a shoe cabinet on your left. On your right, there is a bath room. Every morning I take a shower listening to music. Beyond the entrance place, there is a living room in the middle of my house. The living room has a comfortable sofa, luxurious smart TV and home theater system. I like to spend time watching TV in the living room. These days, I watch TV historical drama about Korean traditional hero.

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-> I will tell you about my house. I live in an apartment in Seocho-gu, which is in the southern part of Seoul.

-> There are three bedrooms, a bathroom, a kitchen and a living room in my apartment.

- > On your right, there is a bathroom.

-> Every morning I take a shower while listening to music.

-> These days, I watch TV a historical drama about a Korean traditional hero on TV.

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Keep being a diligent student Jason! Have a nice day and a happy weekend! smiley

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