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Describe my house (2/2)

작성자: 71219 담당 튜터: Love
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On the left hand side of the living room, there is a kitchen.
My wife always makes delicious food for my family.
Next the living room, there is the biggest room which is used by our couple.
It's decorated with lots of traditional furniture because my honey love it.
The other rooms have built-in closet, relaxing bed and small bookcases.

This is all about my house.
My house is very comfortable and cozy space for relaxing.
Would you like to visit my house?
튜터 교정 답변

On the left hand side of the living room, there is a kitchen. My wife always makes delicious food for my family. Next the living room, there is the biggest room which is used by our couple. It's decorated with lots of traditional furniture because my honey love it. The other rooms have built-in closet, relaxing bed and small bookcases. This is all about my house. My house is very comfortable and cozy space for relaxing. Would you like to visit my house?

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-> Next is the living room, which is the biggest room in my house.

-> It's decorated with lots of traditional furniture because my honey loves it.

-> The other rooms have a built-in closet, a relaxing bed and small bookcases.

-> My house is a very comfortable and cozy space for relaxing.

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Hi Jason,

You gave a great description of your house. Good job! I just want to explain a bit about my corrections. In the first sentence, I omitted the part where you wrote, "which is used by our couple." It's because when you say, "our couple", it sounds like there is another couple except for you and your wife. The pronoun, "our" is also a possessive pronoun, which shows possession, so I think it's inappropriate to say "our couple". As for the other corrections, you just missed using an article. Nevertheless, you did well! Have a nice day! smiley

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