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공개 첨삭 완료 2014. 08. 29 조회 14727

homework unit3

작성자: HWMC201200797 담당 튜터: Wynston2
수강생 원문과 튜터 교정 (Before & After)
학생 제출 원문
What company do you work for?
-> I'm working for Hanwha corporation. It is one of the big company in South Korea. It has many businesses such as insurance, department store, hotel, manufacturing, chemical, and so on.

Please explain me your duties in your company a little bit detail.
-> My duty is about finance. My division is accounting, so I have to manage money every day and make a monthly report for senior manager. And it is needed to make perfect because it is very important position. If someone in my part make a mistake, it is connected to loss directly.

How do you think about your job?
-> Personally, I don't like my job. I'm not interested in about accounting and it is very boring. At first, I want to work at planning division. But my company send me this position because my major is related to numbers, Statistics.
튜터 교정 답변

What company do you work for? -> I'm I working work for the Hanwha Corporation. It is one of the biggest companyies in South Korea, It and has many businesses such as insurance, department stores, hotels, manufacturing, chemical plants, and so on. Please explain me your duties in your company a little bit detail. -> My duty is about finance, and my division is accounting, and being an accountant, my work is very important, and requires much attention to detail, as so I have to manage money on a daily basis, and make a monthly reports for my senior manager.   And it is needed to make perfect because it  is very important position. If someone in my part makes a mistake, it is connected to loss directly. How do you think about your job? -> Personally, I don't like my job. I'm not interested in about accounting and as it is very boring. At first When I first started working there, my preference was to work  I want to work at the planning division, but my company send placed me in this position because my university major  is related to numbers and Sstatistics.

 

Jun -- I just want you to bear in mind, to LEAVE OUT THE QUESTIONS.  Your paragraphs in the future should reflect a combined statement, so that it reads like a free flowing of ideas.  This is a great attempt, and the more we do, you will gradually improve.  

Great job!

 

Teacher Wilson

 

 

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