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공개 첨삭 완료 2014. 09. 01 조회 13254

about my childhood_part1

작성자: HCC200902319 담당 튜터: Wynston2
수강생 원문과 튜터 교정 (Before & After)
학생 제출 원문
Looking back to my childhood memories, I was just an ordinary student who didn't get noticed very much. It seems that I didn't have much memorable occasions when I was in teen ages because I was not such brave to break the school rule for enjoying a kind of rebellion. Rather I was a timid student who focused on me, not being in front of others.

Something memorable that happened to me when I was in teen ages was that sometimes I skipped the private institutes where I spent most of my time after school and went to a movie theater to watch a Chinese action movie which was quite popular among teenagers. I was also a big fan of Chinese action stars such as Jackie Chan.
튜터 교정 답변

Looking back to my childhood memories, I was just an ordinary student who didn't get noticed very much. It seems that I didn't have much memorable occasions when I was in a teenager, ages because I was not so such brave to become a notorious school rebel who enjoyed breaking the school rules. Rather, I was a shy and timid, and preferred not to be that obvious to others. student who focused on me, not being in front of others. Nevertheless, I do recall something memorable that happened to me when I was in teen ages was that at I sometimes I skipped the private institutes where I spent most of my time after school, I would sneak out went to a movie theater to watch a Chinese action movie, which was quite popular among teenagers in those days. I was happend to be also a big fan of Chinese action stars such as Jackie Chan.

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