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공개 첨삭 완료 2014. 09. 02 조회 12539

Let me introduce myself

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Hi Juls, my name is TaeGyu Hwang. and i am 28 years old.
i have worked at SAMSUNG SDS for 2 years.
i am a regular employee in development department.
my main role as engineer is producting powerful software for customer.
i live with my famaily in a apartment.
there are four people my father, mother, my younger brother and me.
my hobby is taking a walk.
after eating a lunch, my coworker and i go to the nearby park. it makes me refreshing.
i am a outgoing person. so, when i have a free time, i like to watch a movie with my close friends.
튜터 교정 답변

Hi Juls, my name is TaeGyu Hwang. and i am 28 years old. i have worked at SAMSUNG SDS for 2 years. I am a regular employee in a development department. my main role as an engineer is producting powerful software for customer. i live with my family in an apartment. We are four in the family, my father, mother, my younger brother and me. my hobby is taking a walk. after eating a lunch, my coworker and i go to the nearby park. it feels refreshing. I am an outgoing person. so, whenever I have free time, i like to watch a movie with my close friends.

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