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공개 첨삭 완료 2014. 09. 12 조회 12662

Unit 7 - your childhood

작성자: HWMC201200797 담당 튜터: Wynston2
수강생 원문과 튜터 교정 (Before & After)
학생 제출 원문
I had grown up in Chonan. It is a small city in Korea. In Chonan, I moved several times in the city because my family and I want to live in bigger house. One of the house I lived had a very beautiful scene. Since it was located to rural area, we could walk around there to feel natural things. I went to middle and high school in the same city. In korea, students study very hard even all day lond for 6 years. Therefore I don't have much experiences when I was a student except for studying. But I don't regret about that. I think I'm happy now from studying hard at that time.

I'm not certain you remember below comment on 2014-09-10 homework. This is former homework.

(***Jun --- try and develop the sentence below a little more. I'm not clear what you are really trying to convey to me. (Use your thesaurus).)

=> It means most people that live alone in Korea don't want to interact with their neighborhood and relatives.
튜터 교정 답변

I had grown grew up in Chonan. It is a small city located in a rural area in Korea. In Chonan, I moved there several times from in the city because my family and I wanted to live in a bigger house. One of the houses I lived in had a very beautiful scene. Since it was located to Rurally located, area, we could walk around the area and experience Nature first-hand. there to feel natural things. I went to attended middle and high school in the same city there, in korea, students where we study studied very hard, even and often all day lond long for 6 years!  For this reason, my experiences have been mostly limited to studying.  Therefore I don't have much experiences when I was a student except for studying. But Nevertheless, I don't regret about that. I believe I've think I'm happy now benefited from studying hard at during all that time.

 

I'm not certain you remember below comment on 2014-09-10 homework. This is former homework. (***Jun --- try and develop the sentence below a little more. I'm not clear what you are really trying to convey to me. (Use your thesaurus).) => It means most people that live alone in Korea don't want to interact with their neighborhood and relatives.  OKAY - I UNDERSTAND.

*** I hope you can glean some value from my review and feedback.  

Interesting summary!

 

 

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