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작성자: 1102084903 담당 튜터: Monica
수강생 원문과 튜터 교정 (Before & After)
학생 제출 원문
Q)What is your career philosophy? / What is your career principle?
A)
My career philoshophy is to enjoy what I am doing, love my workplace and never make an enemy. I believe that when I enjoy my job, love my workplace and mingle well with and members, I can build a strong teamwork in my team and bring a tangible result to my company.
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Q)What is your career philosophy? / What is your career principle?

A) My career philoshophy is to enjoy what I am doing, love my workplace and never make an enemy. -ok

I believe that when I enjoy my job, love my workplace and mingle well with and members, I can build a strong teamwork in my team and bring a tangible result to my company.

 -> I believe that when I enjoy my job, love my workplace and mingle well with and members, I can build a strong teamwork in with my teammates and bring a tangible good result to my company.

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