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Present the schedule for the first day

작성자: 73104 담당 튜터: Tiny
수강생 원문과 튜터 교정 (Before & After)
학생 제출 원문
May I have your attention please.
I'll explain the schedule for the first day of the workshop.
Today's schedule is started at 10 O'clock with team activity. This will be over at 6 O'clock.
First, for team activity, all of you are requested to divide into 3 teams including members from different departments.
After then elect a leader and make a team name.
The lunch break time is from 1 to 2.
After team activity you'll have barbeque party at the Rose garden from 6 p.m to 8 p.m.
Presedent Kim is supposed to take part in the party to encourage you.
Also some special presents will be parpared for you during the party.
I promise that you can look forward to that presents.
I hope everyone can participate in today's events.
Thank you for your attention.
튜터 교정 답변

May I have your attention please. I'll explain the schedule for the first day of the workshop. Today's activity will start at 10 O'clock with team. This will finish  at 6 O'clock. First, for team activity, all of you are requested to divide into 3 teams including members from different departments. After then elect a leader and make a team name. The lunch break time is from 1 to 2. After team activity you'll have barbeque party at the Rose garden from 6 pm to 8 pm President Kim is supposed to take part in the party to encourage you. Also some special presents will be parpared for you during the party. I promise that you can look forward to that presents. I hope everyone can participate in today's events. Thank you for your attention.

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