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공개 첨삭 완료 2014. 09. 17 조회 13685

Staying at home during vacations.

작성자: 1101013325 담당 튜터: Wynston1
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I like staying at home during vacations because it saves money and it's vary cozy. I'm vary busy because of my job. So I want to relax at home during my vacation.
Another benepit of staying home is that I don't have money and schedule. I spend my times sleeping in and watching movies and musics. I could do whatever I want to. So I love tne freedom.
Sometimes, I like to meet my friends. Frendship help refresh mind and reduce my stress.
Therefore, I realley like staying at home during my vacations.
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I like staying at home during vacations because it saves money and it's vary very cozy. I'm vary very busy because of my job, so I want prefer to relax at home during my vacation. Another benepit  benefit of staying home, is that I don't have to spend money, and I'm not restricted to a schedule. I spend my times sleeping in, and watching movies, and listening to musics. I could do whatever I want to. So I love tne the freedom! Sometimes, I like to meet my friends. Friendships help refresh my mind and reduce my stress. For these reasons, Therefore, I realley really like staying at home during my vacations.

 

***Great idea  flow ... Teacher Wynston

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