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공개 첨삭 완료 2014. 02. 18 조회 12680

sorry. I have been absent today

작성자: 1100909366 담당 튜터: Paula
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Good afternoon Teacher Paula
sorry. I have been absent today
I was very tired in the morning. so I couldn't listen my ring.

yesterday, I came back early night from my office.
sometimes, Whenever came back home early than other day,
I don't have any idea what to do. (So sad)

yesterday, I watched a japanese animation.
today I'll tell you about this story.
the title is The Garden of Words.
it sounds a little elegante.

The running time is about 45 minutes. very short. and very realistic.
and the story is about high school student and his young literature teacher.
When it rains, the boy didn't go to school in the morning.
he skipped the morning class. instead of that, he goes to a park.
at the park. he met a secret woman. (actually she is a teacher, but he didn't know that)
every rainy days, they met each other. and talk about their selves. (most of his life)
she alse don't want to go school and she has a very hard time in school.
anyway, they sympathize with each's words even though they didn't say their background.

this animation tells that falling in love doesn't care background . . ? . ?

:^)

anyway, It's good for me to write this. because I feel very sleepy. now is 3:30 pm
Thank you for reading my .. um.. letter ?

bye~
튜터 교정 답변

Good Afternoon Teacher Paula.  I'm sorry that I was absent for today because I was very tired and I didn't hear that you were calling me. Yesterday, I came home early. Usually when I get home early, there are times that I don't have any idea what I'm going to do. (So sad)

Yesterday, I watched a Japanese animation movie. I will tell you the story. The title is "The Garden of Words". It sounds a little elegant.

The running time of the movie was about 45 minutes. It's very short but realistic. The story is about a high school student and his young literature teacher. When it is raining, the boy doesn't go to school in the morning instead he goes to the park. He met a woman. (actually she is a teacher, but he doesn't know that). They meet each other when it's raining and they are talking about their lives. She doesn't want to go to school too because she's having a hard time. Anyway, they feel comfortable with each other even though they don't know each other's background.

This animation movie tells us that when we fall in love we don't have to care about the background of the person.

Anyway, It's good for me to write this because I feel very sleepy. The time now is 3:30pm. Thank you for reading my message.

 

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