Hey~ It's me!!

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#1 Good afternoon, Nice to meeting you! My name is Eun-byul Park and I'm an engineer of development part 3, of CMS business team.

-> Good afternoon, Nice to meeting you! My name is Eun-byul Park and I'm an engineer of Development Part 3 of CMS business team.

#2 Today I'm gonna tell you about the keyword, which is the best way to interact with another.

-> Today, I'm gonna tell you about a keyword, which is the best way to interact with one another.

I want to add keyword as a new option, i mean a condition, of searching employee.

-> I want to add another keyword as a new option, a tool that can search employees.

This is for Communication part who care about the relationship among employees.

-> This is a communication tool, to know the information of other employees in order to be familiar with each other.

I want to persuade them to agree with my opinion. The necessity of giving employees a chance to interact with another.

-> I want to persuade them to agree with my opinion. The necessity of giving employees a chance to interact with others.

#3 2013 June to May of this year. What did you do in the one year?

-> From June 2013 to May of this year, what did you do during those months?

I guess, you don't have any special idea, so I want to help you to remind with this magical video.

-> I guess you didn't do anything special, so I want to take you back through this magical video.

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Hey there Effy~! How are you feeling now? I guess you are pretty excited for your presentation. I hope I could listen to your presentation.^^ Good luck to you. I know you work hard for that and I am pretty sure all your hard work will be paid off, just think it is just a piece of cake. I couldn't wait to hear your story~!^^