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공개 첨삭 완료 2014. 09. 30 조회 15737

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작성자: 1101878771 담당 튜터: Ritchell
수강생 원문과 튜터 교정 (Before & After)
학생 제출 원문
#10
From the getgo of this year, I've been a member of WIND and T.WIND operation project.
It is a huge system include A.VAS system
so I was charged of A.VAS module which was really familiar with me.


#11
Last april, I took a off-line class again and It was about SQL which is needed for operation.


#12
April.
T.S. Elioit said that It is the cruelest month and it was same to me

I was a assistant engineer and I was just charged of A.VAS module.
Ant there was a senior engineer working for whole User Interface of WIND system.
Suddenly He should move to another project so I should manage WIND project instead of him.
The WIND system was too big to me and skills that I have to learn was totally unfamiliar with me.

Even worse, there was no one who knows about the job he did.


There were only two could help me.
1st Silverlight book, 2nd my dear Mr.goo, I mean google.

Senior engineer's last word was, "There is no way but to fare with everything by yourself!"
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[CORRECTIONS]

#10 From the getgo of this year, I've been a member of WIND and T.WIND operation project.

-> From the get-go of this year, I've been a member of WIND and T.WIND operation project.

It is a huge system include A.VAS system so I was charged of A.VAS module which was really familiar with me.

-> It is a huge system that includes the A.VAS system, so I was in charged of A.VAS module which was really familiar with me.

#11 Last april, I took a off-line class again and It was about SQL which is needed for operation.

-> Last april, I took an off-line class again and it was about SQL which is needed for operation.

#12 April. T.S. Elioit said that It is the cruelest month and it was same to me I was a assistant engineer and I was just charged of A.VAS module.

-> #12 April. T.S. Elioit said that "it is the cruelest month" and it was the same situation in my case because I was a assistant engineer and I was just in charged of A.VAS module.

Ant there was a senior engineer working for whole User Interface of WIND system.

-> And there was a senior engineer working for whole User Interface of WIND system. (no lapses)

Suddenly He should move to another project so I should manage WIND project instead of him.

-> Suddenly, he was assign to another project so I should manage WIND project instead of him.

The WIND system was too big to me and skills that I have to learn was totally unfamiliar with me.

-> The WIND system was too big/too complex and the skills that I had to learn was totally unfamiliar with me.

Even worse, there was no one who knows about the job he did. There were only two could help me.

-> To make it worse, there was no one who knows about the job/task he did. There were only two who could help me.

st Silverlight book, 2nd my dear Mr.goo, I mean google. Senior engineer's last word was, "There is no way but to fare with everything by yourself!"

-> St Silverlight book, 2nd my dear Mr.goo, I mean google. Senior engineer's last word was, "There is no way but to fare with everything by yourself!" (no lapses)

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