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공개 첨삭 완료 2014. 09. 30 조회 15341

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작성자: 1101878771 담당 튜터: Ritchell
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#25
We can do all these great things, with just adding KEYWORD.


#26(Video playing)
To be a tree, it news water, sun lights, wind, rain, nutritions and many more things.

Human is same also.

I can be s sun, water, sometime a wind, rain for someone I meet and vice versa.

People should be connected.


#27
Through KEYWORD.


#28
If you have any questions please feel free to ask me.
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[CORRECTIONS]

#25 We can do all these great things, with just adding KEYWORD.

-> #25 We can do all these great things, with just adding the KEYWORD.

#26(Video playing) To be a tree, it news water, sun lights, wind, rain, nutritions and many more things.

-> #26(Video playing) To be a tree, it needs water, sun lights, wind, rain, nutritions and many more things.

Human is same also. I can be s sun, water, sometime a wind, rain for someone I meet and vice versa.

-> It works the same way for us. I can be the sun, water, wind, rain for someone I meet and vice versa.

People should be connected. #27 Through KEYWORD. #28 If you have any questions please feel free to ask me.

-> People should be connected through this KEYWORD. #28 If you have any questions please feel free to ask me.

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