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공개 첨삭 완료 2014. 10. 01 조회 13471

About personality

작성자: HWMC201200797 담당 튜터: Wynston2
수강생 원문과 튜터 교정 (Before & After)
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I'm totally optimist. I feel happy easily. When I start to do something new, I always think I can do it. And other people say I'm confident. Everyone can achieve their dreams if they try. Everyone can earn much money if they studied the ways. But, sometimes I was frustrated when I fail some work. I'm too optimistic, therefore it takes very long time to overcome my defeat. When I was put the situation and I was exausted, many friends that have pessimistic minds treat me with their console. Therefore, I think there is not relationship between friendship and personality. We can become friends one another.
튜터 교정 답변

I'm totally optimist. I feel happy easily. When I start to do something new, I always think I can do it. And other people say I'm confident. Everyone can achieve their dreams if they try. Everyone can earn much money if they studied the ways. But, sometimes I was frustrated when I fail some work. I'm too optimistic, therefore it takes very long time to overcome my defeat. When I was put the situation and I was exausted, many friends that have pessimistic minds treat me with their console. Therefore, I think there is not relationship between friendship and personality. We can become friends one another.

 

Jun -- It will be a good exercise if we discuss this at our next session ...

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