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공개 첨삭 완료 2014. 10. 02 조회 14817

Home improvement project

작성자: 1102013886 담당 튜터: Simon
수강생 원문과 튜터 교정 (Before & After)
학생 제출 원문
I live in an apartment, which is located in the eastern part of Suwon.
Two years ago, my family moved into an apartment.
When I first moved into my house, the wall color was all white and dirty.
So, my family decided to change the wallpaper and decorating in the living room.

We replaced the old wallpaper.
The new wallpaper has a bright, modern design and it has a grey color.
It made the room brighter.
We also decided to get new furniture.
We got a new coffee table, a TV and sofa.

I like these new change in my house.
Overall, I am satisfied with the changes to my house.
튜터 교정 답변

I live in an apartment, which is located in the eastern part of Suwon. Two years ago, my family moved into an apartment. When I first moved into my house, the wall color was all white and dirty. So, my family decided to change the wallpaper and decorating in the living room. We replaced the old wallpaper. The new wallpaper has a bright, modern design and it has a grey color. It made the room brighter. We also decided to get new furniture. We got a new coffee table, a TV and sofa. I like these new change in my house. Overall, I am satisfied with the changes to my house.

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Corrections

 I like these new change in my house.

—► I like these new changes in my house.

I also live in an apartment. I live with my younger brother and father. It has two rooms. I share my besdroom with my younger brother. We have been living here since I was elementary student. I love our neighborhood because it's peaceful and very accesible to different important places.

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