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공개 첨삭 완료 2014. 10. 02 조회 15024

My opinion about getting divorced

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It is more difficult to get divorced than get married in life. As the text said, the couples that had consumed two years after getting married didn't know each other so they seemed to have divorced so hard. I could understand those cases. I rarely had done it like them. Are there even person that loves only me and do everything for me except my mother? If they are fall in love with each other, it's correct to hope that they give more and share something to each other. But getting married is a real life, almost combat field. More leaning to each other, it makes them harder. Please make a line to think each other reasonly and keep it. like a girl friend or boy friend, not a wife or a husband. If you do like that, you are happy in your married life.
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It is more difficult to get divorced than get married in life. As the text said, the couples that had consumed two years after getting married didn't know each other so they seemed to have divorced so hard. I could understand those cases. I rarely had done it like them. Are there even person that loves only me and do everything for me except my mother? If they are fall in love with each other, it's correct to hope that they give more and share something to each other. But getting married is a real life, almost combat field. More leaning to each other, it makes them harder. Please make a line to think each other reasonly and keep it. like a girl friend or boy friend, not a wife or a husband. If you do like that, you are happy in your married life.

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-> I could understand those cases. I almost had done it like them.

-> Is there even a person who loves only me and will do everything for me except my mother?

-> If they are fall in love with each other...

-> However, getting married is a real life situation, almost like a combat field.

->  More leaning to each other, it makes them harder. (Clarify your meaning in this sentence) Suggestion: "Leaning on each other will make them stronger."

-> Please make a line to think about each other reasonably and keep it, like a girl friend or boy friend, not a wife or a husband.

-> If you do like that, you will be happy in your married life.

 

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Hi James,

Thank you for sending your composition and sharing your thoughts about divorce. I hope my corrections help. Have a nice day! smiley

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