I Recommend you a bicycle "Birdy"[1]
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Hi , I just wrote this article to recommend you a bike "Birdy". Birdy is foldable and compact bike. I don't have ever seen such good bike! Since my space is limited and there are too many stuffs to keep, saving space is very important issue!
I usually park my bike out of my house. When it's raining, it is very sad to watch my bike going to be wet. And there is capability of theft of my bike(or the parts of it, wheels and chair) !!
So I was finding the one that is very easy to carry and keep. And it has to has good performance. But it was really hard to find, because there are few essential conditions to satisfy me.
Condition No1. : The bike must has gear shift system(at least 8 degree of it).
Condition No2. : Wheels of the bike must bigger than 16"(for the speed).
Condition No3.(most important) : Must easy to fold and unfold.
Condition No4.(Conditional) : Suspension system, light weight, easy to repair, Good Design...
(to be continued)
I usually park my bike out of my house. When it's raining, it is very sad to watch my bike going to be wet. And there is capability of theft of my bike(or the parts of it, wheels and chair) !!
So I was finding the one that is very easy to carry and keep. And it has to has good performance. But it was really hard to find, because there are few essential conditions to satisfy me.
Condition No1. : The bike must has gear shift system(at least 8 degree of it).
Condition No2. : Wheels of the bike must bigger than 16"(for the speed).
Condition No3.(most important) : Must easy to fold and unfold.
Condition No4.(Conditional) : Suspension system, light weight, easy to repair, Good Design...
(to be continued)
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