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공개 첨삭 완료 2014. 10. 08 조회 13871

Introduce my self

작성자: 119248 담당 튜터: Mitch
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Hello, my name is Myung-Han and you can call me Han. My age is mid-40s and I have been married for 7 years. I live in an apartment which is located in Anyang. I have been working in Samsung SDS for 13 years. I am currently working as a project engineer. I think I’m outgoing person. I usually spend my free time to go on a trip with my family. At last my life goal is to be happy with my family for a long time. To accomplish my goal, I will always work hard, study on weekdays and try to have a good time with my family on weekends. Thank you for listen to introduce myself.
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[CORRECTION]

Hello, my name is Myung-Han and you can call me Han. I'm in mid-40s and I have been married for 7 years. I live in an apartment which is located in Anyang. I have been working in Samsung SDS for 13 years. I am currently working as a project engineer. I think I’m an outgoing person. I usually spend my free time going on a trip with my family. At last, my life goal is to be happy with my family for a long time. To accomplish my goal, I will always work hard, study on weekdays and try to have a good time with my family on weekends. Thank you for listening to my self introduction.

[COMMENT]

Hello, Yami! I like the way you presented your ideas about yourself. You're able to provide a lot of detail to your answer. I hope that you'll be able to accomplish your goal in life. Please go over with my corrections that I made for you above. Keep it up!

Have a great day,

T. Mitch ^^

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