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공개 첨삭 완료 2014. 10. 13 조회 12959

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I like to cook Korean food.
Most of all I like to cook Kimchi stews because it is very easy to cook them.
They are very common in Korea.
Many people enjoy eating them and there are a lot of famous places where they are made well.
My wife and I often have a dinner with Kimchi stews I make.
As I mentioned, it is easy to cook them.
Kimchi stews normally need just Kimchi.
When you want to eat more deliciously, you can put meat or tofu.
Whenever I eat tasty food, I always feel light and happy.
I will cook delicious Kimchi stews next Sunday.
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I like to cook Korean food. Most of all I like to cook Kimchi stews because it is very easy to cook them. They are very common in Korea. Many people enjoy eating them and there are a lot of famous places where they are made well. My wife and I often have a dinner with Kimchi stews I make. As I mentioned, it is easy to cook them. Kimchi stews normally need just Kimchi. When you want to eat more deliciously, you can put meat or tofu. Whenever I eat tasty food, I always feel light and happy. I will cook delicious Kimchi stews next Sunday.

1. I like to cook Korean food. Good job! smiley

2. Most of all I like to cook Kimchi stews because it is very easy to cook them. -> Most of all I like to cook Kimchi stews because it is very easy to cook.

3. They are very common in Korea. Good job! smiley

4. Many people enjoy eating them and there are a lot of famous places where they are made well. Good job! smiley

5. My wife and I often have a dinner with Kimchi stews I make. Good job! smiley or better say -> My wife and I often have dinner with Kimchi stews I cook.

6. As I mentioned, it is easy to cook them. Kimchi stews normally need just Kimchi.Good job! smiley

7. When you want to eat more deliciously, you can put meat or tofu. Good job! smiley

8. Whenever I eat tasty food, I always feel light and happy. Good job! smiley

9. I will cook delicious Kimchi stews next Sunday.  -> I will cook delicious Kimchi stew next Sunday.

 

Hi Kent,

Good job! You were able to construct sentences well. you can also express your thoughts in this composition. Always be carerful in using articles [a, an, the]. Nonetheless, you did a good work. Keep it up! :-)

 

 

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