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공개 첨삭 완료 2014. 10. 14 조회 13962

Unit 11

작성자: HWMC201200797 담당 튜터: Wynston2
수강생 원문과 튜터 교정 (Before & After)
학생 제출 원문
I usually take a rest on weekend. It is very important for me because I feel happiness. On weekend, I can read books and do my another work that I really like. Many people in Korea go to work on weekend. I think it is a big problem because they don't have a time that they can use for their happiness. Many old people in Korea still think working for a long time can achieves good results. I totally don't agree that. It is another hell to everyone.
튜터 교정 답변

I usually take a rest on weekendS. It is very important for me because I feel happY iness. On weekendS, I can read books and do my another work that I really like. Many people in Korea go to work on weekendS. I think it is a big problem because they don't have a time that they can use for their happiness. Many old people in Korea still think working for a long time can achieves good results. I totally don't DISagree WITH that. It is JUST another hell to everyone!

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