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공개 첨삭 완료 2014. 10. 15 조회 13301

Watching Sports

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I love watch sports games. Especially I love watch soccer, baseball. When I was young in the 20ties, I loved watch baseball games. The time Professional baseball teams are established was in 1980, I remember. There were 7 teams. There were several super heros in most teams. A player's heating rate was more than zero point four. A pitcher's everage saving point was under 1.0. Most exciting games were big match between countries. Several years ago Korea Team won the first prize in Olympic. Pitcher Park in Major league in USA and Ryu now in Major league greatly contributed to Korea even won the strongest Kuba team. Talking about Soccer, Korea had tremendeous plays in 2002 World-Cup held in Korea and Japan. Most Koreans weared red shirts were very delightful several days in all over the country.
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I love TO watch sports games, especially I love watch soccer, baseball. When I was young in the 20ties TWENTIES, I loved watchING baseball games. I RECALL AT THAT TIME THAT The time Professional baseball teams are WERE established was in 1980, I AND  remember  There were 7 teams. There were several super heroEs  PLAYERS WITHin most THOSE teams. A player's heating HITTING rate was more than zero point four. A pitcher's everage AVERAGE saving point was under 1.0. Most exciting games were big matchRS between countries. Several years ago Korea'S Team won the first prize in AT THE OlympicS. Pitcher Park in THE Major league in THE USA, and Ryu WHO IS now in THE Major league, greatly contributed to Korea'S even won the strongest Cuba team. Talking about REGARDING Soccer, Korea had tremendeous plays in 2002 World-Cup WHICH WAS held in Korea and Japan. Most Koreans weared red shirts, INDICATING were very delightful several days in all over the country.

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