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공개 첨삭 완료 2014. 10. 16 조회 15549

Cooking

작성자: 118406 담당 튜터: Wynston2
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I had a memorable party, I recall that my family celebrate my sons' first birthday, we call it "doll". At that time I invited my friends and my company co-workers. My wife made lots of dishes, my mother in law helped her a lot. The ceremony for my son held in front of people. Every baby of the "doll" should select one item, money, thread or book or something else. People belive if the baby pick up money he or she will have great fortune, and if he or she pick up book he or she will be a good student, and thread he or she live long. People coming for celebrating mostly prepared present for the baby, the golden ring, or they simply prepare some money.
Anyhow, I don't cook very well, even if I like to cook, my wife don't let me cook. I can cook some ramyun, sort of Korean instant noodle. My ramyun, several years ago my two kids prefered to eat, but in these days no more.
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I had a memorable party, I recall that my family celebrate my sons' first birthday, we call it "doll". At that time I invited my friends and my company co-workers. My wife made lots of dishes, AND my mother in law helped her a lot. The ceremony for my son WAS held in front of MANY people. Every baby of the "doll" should select one item, money, thread or book or something else. People beliEve if the baby pick up money, he or she will have great fortune, and if he or she pick up book he or she will be a good student, and thread he or she live long. People coming for THE celebratiION mostly prepared presentS for the baby, SUCH AS the golden ring, or they simply prepare some money. Anyhow, I don't cook very well, even if I like to cook, my wife Won't let me cook. I can cook some ramyun, A sort of Korean instant noodle WHICH  ramyun, several years ago my two kids LOVED TO EAT SEVERAL YEARS AGO.  THESE DAYS HOWEVER,THEY DON'T SEEM TO LIKE IT ANYMORE! prefered to eat, but in these days no more.

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