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공개 첨삭 완료 2014. 10. 16 조회 15687

Internet

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I am very satisfied with the internet environment in Korea. Korea has been one of the contries that have a most fast internet speed.
Do you know that we already had a facebook like SNS service long before 10 years ago?
Named cyworld, sweeped all over the country at that time, and it was a trend that people put their daily life upon the website and share it with their friends.
Anyway it has disapeared in history, now most korean use NAVER as their search engine and social relation tool. NAVER has a 75% market share in Korea, because NAVER has all of the things that people want. If you know korean character, you don't have to visit other websites for most of the information you want. NAVER has all of it. such as search engine, mail, blog, cafe, news, messanger, game, shopping, map, music, book..
NAVER is my favorite and always to go website.
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I am very satisfied with the internet environment in Korea. Korea has been one of the coUntries that have a most THE fastEST internet speed. Do you know that we already had a facebook like SNS service long before FOR MORE THAN 10 years ago? Named Cyworld, IT sweeped SWEPT all over ACROSS the country at that time, and it was a trend that people UTILIZED put their daily life upon the website and shareD LIFE EXPERIENCES it with their friends. Anyway it has disapeared in history, NowADAYS, most KoreanS use NAVER as their search engine and social relation tool. NAVER has a 75% market share in Korea, because NAVER IT has all of the things TOOLS that people want  If you know Korean character, you don't have to visit other websites for most of the information you want. NAVER has all of it such as search engine, mail, blog, cafe, news, messanger, MESSENGER gameS, shopping, mapS, music, AND bookS. NAVER is my favorite SEARCH ENGINE / SNS.  and always to go website.

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