[My impressive baseball game]
수강생 원문과 튜터 교정 (Before & After)
학생 제출 원문
I can exaclty remember the game which is unforgettable. It was more than 15 years ago,
especially when I was in high school. In one sunday, I and some of my friends decided to play
baseball game but we were only 10, and there was no proper place either. Thus we wandered for a while and finally found out some small abandoned yard. I agreed to playing there. Because there were only 10 members, we had to play minimized game for each team with 5 members. My were at defense position and I was a pitcher. I tried to throw fastball as fast as I could. I wanted to show off. But at the first pitching, my plan went wrong. I lost my controll and the ball deviated from the right couse. It directly hit the window of an adjacent house and then the window was broken. All of us out of mind. We went to the house for apologizing but the owner of the house was not there. Actually we had not done such things but at that time we were very scared,
especially when I was in high school. In one sunday, I and some of my friends decided to play
baseball game but we were only 10, and there was no proper place either. Thus we wandered for a while and finally found out some small abandoned yard. I agreed to playing there. Because there were only 10 members, we had to play minimized game for each team with 5 members. My were at defense position and I was a pitcher. I tried to throw fastball as fast as I could. I wanted to show off. But at the first pitching, my plan went wrong. I lost my controll and the ball deviated from the right couse. It directly hit the window of an adjacent house and then the window was broken. All of us out of mind. We went to the house for apologizing but the owner of the house was not there. Actually we had not done such things but at that time we were very scared,
튜터 교정 답변
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