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About my house

작성자: 72105 담당 튜터: Charlanna2
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Let me tell you about my house. I live in apartment with my family. My unit is located on 16th floor in my apartment building which has 20-story. My home has four bed rooms, two bath rooms.
My children have their own room in which we have placed a desk, a chair, a bed and a wordrobe. My wife and i use the largest room together. This room has no furniture except one bed because it has a small dress room. The other is used as guest room for my parents' visiting. Let's move on the living room. It is equiped a large smart TV and small audio system. My family usually enjoy watching movie on this TV through online streaming service. It's very warm in winter and cool in summer in the living room because the direction of this is toward to south. I alway wanted to live large apartment and my home is the result of my dream. But after three years when we moved here, I felt that this is too large for my family. So I think it would be better to move smaller than now.
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Let me tell you about my house. I live in an apartment with my family. My unit is located on the 16th floor of my 20-story apartment building. My home has four bedrooms and two bathrooms. My children have their own room in which we have placed a desk, a chair, a bed and a wardrobe. My wife and I use the largest room. Since the room has a small dressing room in it, this room has no furniture with the exception of our bed. The fourth bedroom is used as a guest room for when our parents visit. As for the living room, it is equipped with a large smart TV and small audio system. My family and I enjoy watching movies in this room; the room is very warm in the winter and cool in the summer. I've always wanted to live in a large apartment, and my home is a result of this dream; however, living in our current apartment  has made me realize the space is too large for my family. Nowadays, I think it would be better to live in a smaller apartment than the one in which we currently reside.

 

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