Recent exeperiance while watching movie
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Three months ago, I watched a movie with my wife at my home.
I wanted to enjoy an exciting movie to relieve her stress.
I decided to watch movie called “The wolf of wall street.”
Because this movie is directed by Martin Scorsese. He is famous director.
And main actor is Leonardo Dicaprio. He is my favorite actor.
I was already watching the trailer, and I became aware of this movie is based on the real story of Jordan Belfort.
Movie was exciting. It showed how to Jordan Belfort did wealthy stock-broker and he fell into the criminal.
But I got one mistake. I didn’t consider my wife was pregnant.
Movie had too many scenes about abusing drug and sexual contents.
After watched, I knew this movie is recorded for the most uses of the word, "fuck".
(from wikipedia, OMG... )
I apologized to my wife and I thought I needed to survey in detail before we were watching the movie.
I wanted to enjoy an exciting movie to relieve her stress.
I decided to watch movie called “The wolf of wall street.”
Because this movie is directed by Martin Scorsese. He is famous director.
And main actor is Leonardo Dicaprio. He is my favorite actor.
I was already watching the trailer, and I became aware of this movie is based on the real story of Jordan Belfort.
Movie was exciting. It showed how to Jordan Belfort did wealthy stock-broker and he fell into the criminal.
But I got one mistake. I didn’t consider my wife was pregnant.
Movie had too many scenes about abusing drug and sexual contents.
After watched, I knew this movie is recorded for the most uses of the word, "fuck".
(from wikipedia, OMG... )
I apologized to my wife and I thought I needed to survey in detail before we were watching the movie.
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