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공개 첨삭 완료 2014. 10. 20 조회 14052

My Weekend

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Ok, I will tell you about what I do on weekends.

Usually I am busy with work and I can’t help my wife on weekdays.
So I do some house chores on weekends such as taking out the garbage, cleaning the floor an so on.

And, I do several things which are my favorites.

First of all, I like exercise, so I often go to the park to play basketball or jogging.

Also, I sometimes go to the mountain with my family in the early morning.
After climbing the mountain, we go to the famous restaurant to eat lunch.

Finally, my wife and I enjoy shopping. We have interest in passion, so we spend enough time in shopping occasionally and when I find my favorite style clothes, I will buy that clothes.

That’s the end of my story.
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Okay, I will tell you about what I do on weekends.

Usually I am busy with work and I can’t help my wife on weekdays.
So I do some house chores on weekends such as taking out the garbage, cleaning the floor, and so on.

And I do several things I really enjoy.

First of all, I like exercise, so I often go to the park to play basketball or go jogging.

Also, I sometimes go to the mountain with my family in the early morning. 
After climbing the mountain, we go to the famous restaurant there to eat lunch. 

Finally, my wife and I enjoy shopping. We both have an interest in fashion, so we occasionally go shopping, and when I find clothing in my favorite style, I will buy that clothing. That’s the end of my story.

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