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공개 첨삭 완료 2014. 10. 21 조회 13395

Playing Sports

작성자: 118406 담당 튜터: Wynston2
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I am not good at Sports. I think the reason is mainly because I have not experienced a lot of sports in my childhood. But, talking about baseball, I have some experience in my elementary school days. I played with my brothers and neighborhoods. We usually played in the ground, sometimes in the park, sometimes in the empty space between houses. But the game was not full scope, that means we never played the game with 9 cross 9 members. Because, there were not so many people in my neighborhood. We usually played 3 to 3. Sometimes 4 to 4. For the protectors' side, one boy pitcher, one boy catcher, the others were baseball keepers.
I recall some happening. One day my elder brother exercised hitting, I was watching his move, but without noticing I had hit on my head with his bat. I was astonished with sudden attack.
But, be grateful for small mercies however, the injury was not so severe.
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I am not good at Sports. I think the reason is mainly because I have not experienced a lot of sports in my childhood, EXCEPT BASEBALL, WHICH I PLAYED WITH MY BROTHERS AND NEIGHBORHOOD KIDS DURING  But, talking about baseball, I have had some experience in my elementary school days. I played with my brothers and neighborhoods. We usually played in the PLAYgroundS, sometimes in the park, AND OFTEN sometimes in the empty space between houses. But the game was not full scope, that means we never played the game with 9 cross 9 members. Because there weren't so many people A LOT OF KIDS in my neighborhood HOWEVER, We usually played 3 to 3 MEMBERS ON OPPOSING SIDES; sometimes 4 to 4. For the protectors' side, WE HAD one boy pitcher, one boy catcher, WHILE the others were baseball keepers.  AND THEN A MAJOR MISHAP TOOK PLACE! I recall some happening. One day AS my elder brother exercised hitting, I was watching his move, but without noticing I had hit on my head with his bat. I was astonished with sudden attack. But, be grateful for small mercies however, the injury was not so severe.

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