Concerts
수강생 원문과 튜터 교정 (Before & After)
학생 제출 원문
I could go the concerts anyone including my friends, my boy friend and also my family members.
But after I have went out with my boy friend, I can't go to concerts with my friends,
because when I see couples by alone, I feel jealous to them and angry at that situation.
And when I have a chance to go concert, I always prefer to sit right infront of the stage.
Which is the standing stage.
Because standing stage is more exciting to enjoy the show. I can see my favorite singer more closer than others and also can take pictures of them.
However, It is really difficult to reserve the standing stage, I have to open lots of browser to prevent from went down of server when it is overwhelmed by a rush of hits.
As a matter of fact I ask to my friends to reserve together at one time.
After this kind of my effort I could reserve the concert ticket that I want to sit.
But after I have went out with my boy friend, I can't go to concerts with my friends,
because when I see couples by alone, I feel jealous to them and angry at that situation.
And when I have a chance to go concert, I always prefer to sit right infront of the stage.
Which is the standing stage.
Because standing stage is more exciting to enjoy the show. I can see my favorite singer more closer than others and also can take pictures of them.
However, It is really difficult to reserve the standing stage, I have to open lots of browser to prevent from went down of server when it is overwhelmed by a rush of hits.
As a matter of fact I ask to my friends to reserve together at one time.
After this kind of my effort I could reserve the concert ticket that I want to sit.
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