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공개 첨삭 완료 2014. 10. 23 조회 13425

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Hi, i'm sheva and im working in theme park as mechanical engineer.
im belonging facility group and im charge in engineering fiels.
So, mathmatics, science, matrials and construction they are always my close friend all the time while working.
I'm 31 years old and i love diversity and i like to meet new people with different backgrounds as well That's why im still practicing and improving my english skills. And i hope to go aboard someday
after graduation, i've not spoken english for a while but i hope to get a job in aboard someday
so i decided my self to study harder and i need to brush up my english.
nice to meet you
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I am Sheva and I'm working at the Theme Park as a mechanical engineer. I belong to the facility group and I'm in charge of engineering; therefore, mathmatics, science, matrials and construction are necessary for my job. I am 31 years old and I love diversity; I like to meet new people from different backgrounds, that's why I am still practicing and improving my English skills. I hope to go aboard someday after I graduate. I've not spoken English for a while but I hope to get a job aboard so I have decided to study harder to improve my English skills.

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