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공개 첨삭 완료 2014. 10. 24 조회 13434

Traveling Internationally

작성자: 118406 담당 튜터: Wynston2
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I attended to baduk match of my university,was chosen as 6 members of university representatives, went to Japan to participate Seoul to Tokyo university annual baduk match. We stayed 4 days in Tokyo area. The last night in Tokyo my party persuaded me to go out to drink, but I did not want to join them. After a few minutes I found my suit changed with a suit of Tokyo university student. The color and shape of the both suit was similar. I had put some money in my suit, but I don't remember how much was there. We don't have cellphone at that time in 1980, I could not get in touch with the drinking group. The next day he came back with my suit, but the night he was so drunken, he did not know how much money he used. Neither did I know how to do it. So I gave up. I did not know that kind of symptom Japanese student showed at that time, several years later I realized it was a "black out".
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I attended to baduk match of my university,was chosen as 6 members of university representatives, went to Japan to participate Seoul to Tokyo university annual baduk match. We stayed 4 days in Tokyo area. The last night in Tokyo my party persuaded me to go out to drink, but I did not want to join them. After a few minutes I found my suit changed with a suit of Tokyo university student. The color and shape of the both suit was similar. I had put some money in my suit, but I don't remember how much was there. We don't have cellphone at that time in 1980, I could not get in touch with the drinking group. The next day he came back with my suit, but the night he was so drunken, he did not know how much money he used. Neither did I know how to do it. So I gave up. I did not know that kind of symptom Japanese student showed at that time, several years later I realized it was a "black out".

I ONCE TRAVELED TO JAPAN TO ATTEND A BADUK MATCH WITH MY UNIVERSITY.  SIX STUDENT COLLEAGES WERE SELECTED AS REPRESENTATIVES TO CONTEST TOKYO UNIVERSITY.  WE STAYED 4 DAYS THERE, AND ON THE FINAL NIGHT, AFTER PERSUASION FROM MY COLLEAGUES TO GO OUT FOR A DRINK ...

 

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