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공개 첨삭 완료 2014. 10. 27 조회 13412

Colleague

작성자: 1102045838 담당 튜터: Lovely
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Well, I don't remember some problems or difficulties with my colleagues or boss.
Nothing.
So let me tell you about new colleaque the beginning of this year.
He is Mr. Jang
We greeted him happily. He is a new colleaque we waited for a long time.
He is bright, out going person and He is a good talker.
He is good at English in our department.
Oneday, he showed magic show to us.
We are really suprised.
thesed days i think that young people has an ability in many quarters
튜터 교정 답변

Well, I don't remember some problems or difficulties with my colleagues or boss. Nothing. So let me tell you about new colleaque the beginning of this year. He is Mr. Jang We greeted him happily. He is a new colleaque we waited for a long time. He is bright, out going person and He is a good talker. He is good at English in our department. Oneday, he showed magic show to us. We are really suprised. thesed days i think that young people has an ability in many quarters

1. Well, I don't remember some problems or difficulties with my colleagues or boss.  GOOD JOB! smiley or BETTER SAY -> Well, I don't any problems or difficulties with my colleagues or boss.

2. So let me tell you about new colleaque the beginning of this year. -> So let me tell you about my new colleague early this year.

3. He is Mr. Jang. GOOD JOB! smiley 

4. We greeted him happily. He is a new colleaque we waited for a long time. GOOD JOB! smiley 

5. He is bright, out going person and He is a good talker. -> He is bright, out going, and he is a good speaker.

6. He is good at English in our department. -> He is one of the people who are good in English in our department.

7. Oneday, he showed magic show to us. -> Oneday, he showed a magic trick to us.

8. We are really suprised. -> We are really surprised.

9. Thesed days i think that young people has an ability in many quarters. -> These days, I think young people have more abilities in different fields.

Hi!

Good job! You were able to express your thoughts in good sentecnces and well organized thoughts. However, be careful when using articles and prepositions. Also be careful on the spelling and correct punctuation marks. Nonetheless, you did a great work! Keep up the good work! :-)

Teacher Lovely

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