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공개 첨삭 완료 2014. 10. 28 조회 14381

Dancing

작성자: 118406 담당 튜터: Wynston2
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I didn't learn how to dance. But when I was in highschool days, I went to the picnic. A classmate asked me to dance in front of the whole class. I was no alternative but to dance. I danced without thinking. I moved my arms, legs and hip as natural as possible. Some friends said it was nice. After that moment, I thought dancing was not so difficult as I imagined. After that, I happened to go dancing club, I tried my motion following the rhythm of the music. I saw other people were dancing, they did not have special technique. So I totally recovered my self-confidence.
Whenever some cheerful music is coming, I feel like to dance automatically.
In these days people seldom have chances to dance, they don't want to move a lot any more.
I suddenly recall the movie "Mr. and Mrs. Smith", they were spies and were happily dancing.
튜터 교정 답변

I didn't NEVER learnED how to dance, but AT ONE TIME DURING when I was in highschool days, I went to the picnic, AND a classmate asked me to dance in front of the whole class.  I HAD was no OTHER alternative but to dance, AND SO I danced without thinking. I moved my arms, legs and hipS as naturalLY as possible. Some friends said it was nice. After that moment, I thought dancing was not so difficult as I HAD imagined. After that, I happened to go dancing club, AND I tried TO my motion WITH following the rhythm of the music. I NOTICED THAT saw other people were dancing WITH NO they did not have special PARTICULAR technique. So I BECAME MORE SELF ASSURED IN MY totally recovered my self- confidence. NOW, whenever some I HEAR cheerful music is coming, I feel like to dance DANCING automatically. In These days, people seldom have chances to dance; they don't want to move a lot any more. I suddenly recall the movie "Mr. and Mrs. Smith", they were spies and were happily dancing.

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