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공개 첨삭 완료 2014. 10. 28 조회 15806

Project

작성자: 1102045838 담당 튜터: Lovely
수강생 원문과 튜터 교정 (Before & After)
학생 제출 원문
10 years ago, I developed software function called Number Portability.
Do you know it?
It is to change only mobile carrier without changing your phone number.
At that time, a year has passed since I enter my company as new employee.
That function makes me very hard.
I got to work at 8 AM and I got off at 2~3AM for 2 month.
I worked Saturday and Sunday at that time.
After I finished this project, I felt really great about having completed this project successfully
튜터 교정 답변

10 years ago, I developed software function called Number Portability. Do you know it? It is to change only mobile carrier without changing your phone number. At that time, a year has passed since I enter my company as new employee. That function makes me very hard. I got to work at 8 AM and I got off at 2~3AM for 2 month. I worked Saturday and Sunday at that time. After I finished this project, I felt really great about having completed this project successfully

1.  10 years ago, I developed software function called Number Portability.  -> 10 years ago, I developed a software function called Number Portability.

2. It is to change only mobile carrier without changing your phone number.GOOD JOB! smiley

3. At that time, a year has passed since I enter my company as new employee.->At that time, a year has passed since I entered my company as new employee.

4. That function makes me very hard. -> That function makes me think very hard.

5. I got to work at 8 AM and I got off at 2~3AM for 2 month. ->I got to work at 8 AM and I got off at 2~3AM for 2 months.

6. I worked Saturday and Sunday at that time. -> I worked during/every Saturdays and Sundays at that time.

7. After I finished this project, I felt really great about having completed this project successfully. GOOD JOB! smiley or BETTER SAY -> After I finished this project, I felt really great about having completed it successfully.

 

Hi!

You did a good job, you were able to make good sentences, you were also very careful wit the verbs tenses, spelling and punctuation this time. Kudos! You have improved a lot. Keep up the good work! ;-)

Teacher Lovely

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