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공개 첨삭 완료 2014. 11. 04 조회 13767

House

작성자: 119846 담당 튜터: Wynston1
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Most koreans live in apartment. You know, korea is small size country campared to China or America. When our country drove economic development campaign in 1970s, they constructed a lot of apartments for the people. It was the most effective way to deliver houses to people in a relatively short construction time. If you come to korea, you will be surprised to see the apartments range. In the States, apartments were once considered as houses for the poor. But in Korea, apartment is the most broad way of living style.
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COMPARED TO THE UNITED STATES OR CHINA, THE LAND SPACE OF KOREA IS MUCH SMALLER IN SIZE, AND AS WE HAVE QUITE A HUGE POPULATION, LIVING SPACE IS VERY COSTLY.  FOR THIS REASON, most Koreans live in apartmentS. You know, korea is small size country campared to China or America. When our country SPEARHEADED AN economic development campaign in 1970s, they ENCOURAGED THE constructed CONSTRUCTION OF a lot of apartments for the people. It was the most effective way to deliver REASONABLY SIZED LIVING SPACE to people in a relatively short construction time. If you WERE EVER TO VISIT come to Korea, you will WOULD be surprised to see the MASSIVE RANGE OF APRTMENT COMPLEXES. apartments range. In the States, apartments were once considered as houses for the poor,  But in Korea, apartmentS ARE THE MOST COMMON MODE OF HABITAT. is the most broad way of living style.

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