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공개 첨삭 완료 2014. 11. 05 조회 15078

Who am i ?(Introducing myself and my family)

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Hi, my name is Seok-yun Park. Please call me June briefly. 38 years old. Now I work as manager at start-up business incubating center. My core role is counsulting start-up company.(especially sales method).
I have been married for five years. I have a cuty four-year-old girl whose name's Gee-one.
These days, I and my wife are into joining in festivals at our hometown.We join in festivals every saturday, I think it's very useful educationally for my girl. So i don't have enough free time, but it's my pleasure.
튜터 교정 답변

Hi, my name is Seok-yun Park. Please call me June.I am 38 years old. I am currently working as a manager in a start-up business incubating center. My core role is as a counsulant in starting-up a company.(especially sales method). I have been married for five years. I have a cute four-year-old daughter whose name is Gee-one. These days, I and my wife are into joining some festivals in our hometown.We join the festival every saturday, I think it's very educational for my girl. So I don't have enough free time, but it's my pleasure.

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